Basically, I decided I wanted to incorporate a multimedia element to my project. I want to include a DVD with a movie type thing in the chapbook. So, here's a first draft of the movie...I found some interviews from a chaplain, a "tie-down team", and several members of the press who have witnessed over 100 executions by lethal injection in Texas. A lot of their experiences centered around time, which was the theme of the movie. I took the text from their interview and arranged it in a poem-movie format thing. Keep in mind that I am playing around with the pacing and I want to add sound (maybe music, maybe not.) So let me know what you think of pacing as it is...and hopefully it works! Thanks guys!
and if that doesn't work
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EprITUTizKU
let me know if these work in your comments! thanks again.
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I think the pacing is great, it starts of a little slow so your viewers can have a sense of what's going on and then it speeds up a a little at the end. I think it's perfect! :) I felt as if I was the person sitting in the chair about to die some much to think about but so little time. Events and emotions are occurring one after the other like witnesses enters , crying, injection, upset nervousness. I would love to see more.
ReplyDeleteoh I for got to mention I like how you have some of your words overlapping each other so that they appear obscured for a couple of seconds which also plays with time quite nicely and viewers concentration. Because first they are trying to read a word which sometimes in red and when it's in this color the viewers know it's important and they can't miss it, and when they finally get it they are trying to look at the other words that probably had already appeared in a different area on the screen.... at least that was what I was doing.
ReplyDeleteThat was really neat -- the first transition was pretty jarring, but all the rest of the fades and switches came off really well. I liked your repetition of time, of "i can taste it" of feeling nervous...I think it's a really effective and clean piece. The drug names interlaced with the other texts were my favorite moments.
ReplyDeleteI wondered if at the end you might think about fading out the last word/time but that may be too cliche. Also something I considered, but I don't know how it would look, is just having the time in a corner, always present, ticking away or changing and the rest of the text appearing below it in the way you have it. Sort of give time that ever-present and always-moving-forward sort of vibe...
Anyway, I think it's a cool way of incorporating found work in an impactful and artistic way. I'd really like to see more
And I am back for yet another week of posting on your blog, Al. So I thought the pacing in your movie was awesome! I found it extremely powerful, especially when you included the chemicals that were being pumped into the body. I thought at first, I was not going to like that in the flow of things, but then I think it gives it just enough of a scientific feel that it calls into question how we can look at this event as a crime against humanity whereas the executioner perhaps is able to detach himself or herself and look at it as only a job or task to be done (machine-like). I also expected you to flash 'time' one more time at the end, and was a bit happy when you tricked me. I think it is a great element to add to the project! keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI agree with everyone, the pacing seems really accurate and it was a very moving and emotional piece for not even having any music. I think if I were you, I'd actually see what it's like with music. I would play around with either heavy strings/violins/cellos...or keep it piano...something simple, but something intense. Definitely room for a crescendo.
ReplyDeleteI think it's great that you're using a lot of found language for this. The way you arrange it and rearrange it really makes the viewer think about the event, and what's going on inside the prisoner's head. Very nice job!