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For this post I am including mostly text based pieces. These pieces are playing with subject matter from recent politics and primordial human emotion. These pieces explore doubt, hypocrisy, confusion, desire, commitment, chastity, and multiculturalism. In the piece "Exhibit A/Exhibit B" the bold text in Exhibit A is a news clipping from the incident. Exhibit B is text from the actual letter the priest wrote. Would it help if I included this information in the piece? Does it make a difference to the reader?
Let me know what you think about this collection as a whole. Or if "the spirit moves you" comment on individual pieces. What worked well? What did not work well? What does not make sense to you as a reader? How would you improve the pieces?
Get ready for the next post. It should be fun. =)
Tim,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all I really like this idea. I think as the audience, people constantly see these opposing viewpoints but they are rarely pieced together. Anyway, exhibit A/B I was sort of confused. I didn't really understand that the right side of the column was a 'letter'? the priest wrote...it just seemed like another newspaper clipping because you mention USA today..unless I'm totally missing something. I do like how you surround the text with bible quotes. It's very effective. If you include the facts that one is a newspaper and one is from a letter, I think it would really take away from the revelation the reader gets upon figuring it out. I would change the letter side though to maybe make it sound more like a letter.
Aside from that, I think you're really achieving your goals as a writer. These are going to make people think, and hopefully you'll start to stir up some feelings (even bad ones) because you're really pulling on peoples heartstrings talking about religion. I love it.
Heh, it's always amusing what things you can put together. About A/B, I think it's better off with the source unstated, although one could reasonably figure it out anyway. I think it kind of emphasizes these things, these transient words and materials, as passing accounts of something like hypocrisy which people tend to... er, turn the other cheek towards and forget over time. If that made sense. Though I'm not sure that the quotes mesh with it, I always loved that Jesus with a sword quote. Always such a bizarre thing compared to the typical things thrown out there.
ReplyDeleteIn general I think they all work well. They're still very effective, forcing people to see those issues side by side. Hard to justify things people tend to take for granted when faced with such contrasts in proximity.